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Some people say modern innovations brings a lot of problems than benefits. Do you agree or disagree?

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Technology
 has improved in recent days. It is often debatable that
technology
are
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is
 causing troubles rather than bring good impacts. Despite the fact that modern
technology
 has created environmental and social problems. I believe that the convenience or even the safety it has brought to human lives far outweigh its disadvantages.
This
 essay will elaborate the
beneficial
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benefits
benefit
 of
technology
. There is no doubt that
technology
are used
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is used
 by many people in
entire world
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the entire world
,
no one
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no, one
 cannot imagine if they live without it as it made our life sophisticated.
To begin
 with an example, people now can communicate with their friends and family regardless of the location and time differences.
Likewise
, Google Maps help us in
remarkable way
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remarkable ways
a remarkable way
 by easily navigating to the destination, so that one can plan their journey
accordingly
.
In addition
 to
this
, natural calamities like cyclones or thunderstorms are being
precited
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
presented
appreciated
protected
 earlier itself and thereby giving ample time to people in evacuating their places and relocate to secure areas so that the precious life of people can be saved.
On the other hand
, it comes with drawbacks of innovation.
Firstly
, the teenagers
is
Suggestion
are
 more being addicted to
technology
, thereby neglecting their physical fitness and getting their health complications in their early ages.
Secondly
, the radiation of mobile phones
amd
point or cause to go (blows, weapons, or objects such as photographic equipment) towards
aimed
and
 telecommunication towers is alarming and causing the hazardous threat to most of the bird species in
this
 concrete forest. In conclusion, technological innovations certainly have some downsides,
however
, it is preposterous to claim that innovations have more demerits than merits.
Submitted by Michelle Angelina on

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