Television has dominated the free time of people. It can make people lazy and not socialize with others. Do you agree or disagree

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Television is the most popular attraction for people
in
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with
free time. In every home has TV and people see
news
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the news
or cinema with TV, laptops or smartphones. On TV we know news about around the world like as good as bad. We surf the
internet by
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internet, by
phone we are more depend with social net. We do not need people that we see a film or spend a time. It is so
sadly
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sad
. We stopped talking, meeting with friends or going outside
instead
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of
this
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we are sitting in the house and looking for something on the screen of smartphones. We have not any friends, we do not talk with
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
, we do not know that what is happening in the world and with our families. We are social depending. We will be lazy, we order food, clothes, things to
house
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the house
. We use online shopping,
onlain
on a regular route of a railroad or bus or airline system
online
on-line
meetings,
onlain
on a regular route of a railroad or bus or airline system
online
working
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is working
works
,
onlain
on a regular route of a railroad or bus or airline system
online
educations. They are not correctly for our children. Nothing replaces live communication. Due to the fact that people eat while sitting, we are full of not healthy and full people. Be
strong healthy
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strong, healthy
is to be move and
active
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act
action
. The
further
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technology develops, the less people move. It is necessary to use technology in moderation. It must
allowed
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allow
to use televisions or media equipment more than 4-5 hours. I suggest that in work offices or school will have
rooms
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room
for
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to
relax that they will chatted with each others and rooms for doing exercise that they will be strong and not fat.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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