Some people dislike changes in their society and in their own lives and want things to stay the same. Why do some people want things to stay the same? Why should change be regarded as something positive?
1. It is true that some
people
prefer to stay in the same environment for their entire lives. In this
essay, I am going to explain the reason behind this
behaviour and the positive aspects of change in people
and society.
2. The main reason why people
want to stay in their safe and secure place, is past failures. Sometimes this
fear comes from people
's childhood and sometimes from negative experiences as an adult. In the event that a child experiences an accident and loses a family member during their childhood, they might choose not to drive when they reach adulthood. Adults who start a business and end up in bankruptcy usually do not start a new business and prefer to be hired by someone else and stay in their comfort zone. Another example is people
who have experienced an allergic reaction to a particular food and, as a result
, avoid trying new cuisines.
3. Turning to the other side of this
behaviour, change has many advantages for both individuals and society. society and the environment are changing fast and it improves all areas of our lives. For example
, advancements in technology helped us to do online courses and remote jobs during the COVID-19 pandemic. From a personal perspective going through changes can help people
to gain more knowledge and experience. For instance
, if an employee gets a promotion, at the same with a heavier workload and change in the working environment, their quality of life would improve.
In conclusion, while
many people
avoid vulnerability and risk in their lifetime as a result
of past negative experiences, it has many benefits like improving life quality.Submitted by ayda.rahimisadegh on
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure a clear topic sentence at the beginning of each paragraph to guide the reader.
Task Achievement
Expand on your examples by explaining how they specifically relate to the question asked. This helps in reinforcing your argument and providing a more in-depth analysis.
Coherence & Cohesion
Try to include a wider range of linking phrases to help paragraphs flow more naturally and to demonstrate a higher level of language proficiency.
Task Achievement
While revisiting past experiences, connect these examples more clearly to the reasons why individuals prefer stability over change, to strengthen your argument.
Coherence & Cohesion
You've provided a clear introduction and conclusion, effectively framing your essay.
Task Achievement
You used relevant examples to support your points, which helps in illustrating your arguments.
Coherence & Cohesion
You have maintained a logical structure throughout the essay, which makes it easier to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite