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Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present .To what extend do you agree or dis agree ?

#value #dis
History tells us about the past incidents and many people think that knowledge of
past
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the past
 is not beneficial in todays world
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 I disagree with that opinion as
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a present
 is a continuation of past and individuals
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 societies and nations get more advantages
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Firstly
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 people can understand the value of todays world
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 if they know about the past
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For example
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 only those who know know about the independence movement cannot misuse the freedom we are getting today as many martyrs and patriots
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 who lost their lives
for
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to
in
 defending the sovereignty of the nation
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Also
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 by knowing the story of famous persons and scientific experiments people understand that nothing is
impossible but
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impossible, but
 time and patience needed to overcome the challenges that would be beneficial for todays young people
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In addition
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 implementing a project a country must ought to work
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at
 a chain that must join the past to present
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 Consider
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 Indias spaceship projects where the scientists have been working for more than decades and they cannot
launche
set up or found
launch
launched
launches
 a rocket
with in
internal to, not outside; located in the bounds of
within
 one day
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All the developments we are using nowadays is a result of many researches and experiments of long previous time
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Moreover
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 past events enable to learn from mistakes
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many
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Many
 norms and values of society has evolved as
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a result
result
the result
 of past events
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For example
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 now we are living in
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an
eggalatarian
favoring social equality
egalitarian
societ
an extended social group having a distinctive cultural and economic organization
society
 as we know that male
domine
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do mine
 in the past hinder the progress of a community
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 To conclude
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,
past
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the past
 has an impact on present and which is
continuation
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the continuation
a continuation
 of present and get a chance to learn more and ignore mistakes for a better future
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 So learning past is vital
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