Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree? To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?

With social media`s growing presence
on
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in
our lives, every day we are in the exposure of news about film stars and music celebrities. Most of the people think that with a huge amount of money they make, they are living in utopia and
are not engaged
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do not engage
don't engage
with any kind of problems at all.
On the other hand
, there are certain theories that are common among people that celebrities are not satisfied with their lives and they are not as happy as common people. I somewhat agree with the latter approach towards
this
issue. The reason for
this
is that
although
they are rich and famous, at
last
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least
they are human just like everybody else with the certain kinds of needs to be satisfied and one of the most important needs
that is
felt
missing
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was missing
amongst the all in film stars and music celebrities is privacy. As I mentioned before, privacy is a missing link of
celebrities
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celebrities'
lives. When your privacy has been violated, you will not be able to do your ordinary activities and
this
will be
result
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a result
the result
to
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of
in
the situation that utilizing of your wealth in the best manner becomes impossible. Just imagine the situation that a movie superstar wanted to go for a walk with his or her child, how hard is to deal with people`s looks, let alone facing with the crowds requesting for taking
picture
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pictures
and so many other requests that people will have. To conclude,
although
celebrities are rich and absorb attentions and loves everywhere, they
are facing
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are faced
with so many difficulties that common people are not engaged with. The more money they make and the more famous they become, the bigger problems they are dealing with as we have
this
idiom that “a big head has a big ache”.
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