The idea of having a single career is becoming an old fashioned one. The new fashion mil be to have several careers or ways of earning money and further education will be something that continues throughout life.

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the
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style of people had increased manifold and the social status
play
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plays
a very important role in people’s
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
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and the social status it has become necessary for the people to increase their earnings. To increase their income many people in today’s world are adopting more than
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career
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has helped them to almost double their incomes. But these
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, to be successful in both the careers
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needs to have deep knowledge about the subject.
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knowledge can
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only be gained
be gained only
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work for extra hours and even do work on
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weekends
the weekend
too. All these have certainly made our pockets full of money. Another reason for people to choose
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second careers
a second career
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along with their main profession is because it is their hobby. We have seen many examples that there has been a lot of people
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who, although
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been very successful in their
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start something new like writing novels as their
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career
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helps them stay secure financially and enjoy their hobbies and can even earn through it.
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it seems that no matter how successful
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is if he or she wants to have a new
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it becomes necessary for them to learn new things about their new careers. I do
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believe that education is a process and not a product. No matter how old
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is there is always something new to learn.
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, certainly education is something that continues throughout the
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