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Some people believe that they should be able to keep all the money they earn, and should not have to pay tax to the state. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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In the present scenario,
people
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 are putting a lot of
efforts
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effort
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to earn
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into earning
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 and
save
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 money.
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, a section of the society believes in keeping the earned income to themselves by not paying any taxes to the nation. Even though they have genuine reasons
behind
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behind it
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, I completely disagree with the
above mentioned
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above-mentioned
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 notion. Every person prepares
the
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a
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 budget wherein their motive is to save maximum money. There are innumerable reasons behind it; to meet their
over exceeding
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 expenditures; to employ the income into a more lucrative idea or maybe the dissatisfaction of the government.
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, in a family of four members wherein only one person is earning he has to work really hard to manage the needs of the family and pay out the taxes. In
such
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 a situation they always look for additional income by skipping the tax fee and investing somewhere else. In total,
people
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 believe
the
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that
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non payment
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non-payment
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 of duty will resolve their financial issues
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,
on the contrary
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, one has to always look at the broader spectrum. The tax amount received by the state is being used for the welfare of the citizens only. The development of the parks and historic buildings, reserves to meet contingencies and many more are being taken care of by them. In some countries, namely Canada, contribution
amount
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amounts
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 act as
a
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apply
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health insurance to the
people
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 and
also
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 provide free education in the schools.
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, it is the moral responsibility of every citizen.
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, in the long
run
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run,
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 regular tariff
fee
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fees
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 will prove fruitful for us only.
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,
this
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argued
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 the need to pay taxes by understanding the perspective of the
people
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 refraining
to pay
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from paying
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 them. Despite financial issues, I completely disagree with the thought
to skip
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of skipping
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 tax
return
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returns
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 to the government.

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task response
Provide a clearer position in the introduction to clearly state whether you agree or disagree with the statement. This will help the reader understand your perspective from the beginning.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph is linked logically to the next, and that there is a clear overall progression of ideas. Separate the ideas into distinct paragraphs to aid coherence and readability.
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