When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous. In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterise a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria?

Money and popularity is the main factor that defines the success of people.
However
, it is not always true, in my opinion, there are other factors that measure successful individuals and I will discuss it in the following paragraphs. It is a preconception that money is equal to success. Because no one can buy family, health and friends. I believe that a successful person is a person who finds a balance between work, family and health.
For example
, some rich people have own island and do not have time to enjoy being there. There is no purpose of the wealth is you are sick and no one can help you. As well as, most of the celebrities have psychological problems, take,
for example
, Britney Spears. As she did not have a private space to be on herself and photographers had been following her everywhere. It is undeniable,
that
Suggestion
that's
more important to be
happy
Suggestion
happier
than to be rich. Some people are working hard to be wealthy.
Nevertheless
, on the way to achieve it, they are losing family, friends and
wellbeing
Suggestion
well being
.
Thus
, after all
this
loses money cannot bring satisfaction and peace in the human's mind.
This
is a reason why a balance in life has a significant effect on the real measure of success. Taking everything into consideration, I think that achievements cannot be counted by only money, as it has a more complex definition that includes different aspects of
humans
Suggestion
human
lives, like work, lifestyle, family and health.
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