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food can be produced much more cheaply today because of improved fertilizers and better machinery. however ,some of the method used to do this may be dangerous to human health and may have negative effects on local communities to what extent do you you agree or disagree?

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The global population has increased over the
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 few decades, it is necessary to produce more
food
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 to ensure people's feeding. Nowadays,
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 the very methods of
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 production
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 as fertilizers and better
machinery
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 that have made the
food
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 cheaper; there are
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 drawbacks which threat to human health caused by modern industrial agriculture. To start with, it is admitted that mechanisation has a number of benefits. For years, the mass use of chemical fertilisers and pesticides has greatly increased plant growth and
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 promoted yields of produce.
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, greater profits are brought to
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 producers and prices become more affordable especially to low-income household. With little doubt, chemical use has offered significant improvements in the rural economy. Meanwhile, the application of
machinery
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 has made farming work less time -consuming. Compared to the past when harvesting used to take days, Morden mechanizations have reduced time for
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 demanding task to just a few hours. Thanks to intensive farming, farmers spare more time for relaxing, taking care of their family or some generating activities.
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, there are a number of negative effects that need public attention. Regarding the chemical use, a host of issues may arise.
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, water may be greatly polluted which may do great harm to animal species, especially in the countryside.
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, the consumption of
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 that contains industrial chemicals may cause illnesses
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 as
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 poisoning and cancer. With respect to
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, the burning of fossil fuels in operating devices emits the carbon dioxide into the atmosphere which result in air contamination and global warming. In conclusion, using fertilizers and
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 to produce
food
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 is a helpful tool to cover the demand of increasing
food
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.
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, if these methods are not used correctly, human and environment could be affected.
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 the reason why shifting consumers as well as farmers towards a more sustainable system of agriculture.

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