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The pictures below show how tomato ketchup is made. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

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The provided pictures depict the process of how tomato
ketchup
 is made.
Overall
, there are 15 stages in general, from picking
tomatoes
 to serving the produced
ketchup
 with a large variety of foods,
such
 as
hamburger
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hamburgers
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 and fries.
The first step is
 that the
tomatoes
 are picked and put into baskets.
Then
, they are carefully selected
according to
 their quality. Once
decent quality
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tomatoes
 have been separated, they are
then
 sent to the
ketchup
 factory, where their skin is peeled, seeds are removed and stalks are detached. After being collected in containers, the
tomatoes
 are
then
 crushed and put into liquid in order to add sugar, salt and vinegar.
Following
this
, they are ready to boil under
controlled
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 temperature. Having been left to cool for two hours, the liquid is
then
 poured into individual bottles. The bottles are
labeled
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 and
subsequently
 sent for packing before quality assurance.
Next,
the boxes of
ketchup
 are delivered to supermarkets, where they are sold to customers.
Finally
, the
ketchup
 can be served with a wide range of foods.
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task response
The essay provides a clear and comprehensive overview of the process of making tomato ketchup. However, to improve task response, ensure that all key stages of the process are covered in sufficient detail. Additionally, ensure that you fully cover the main features as required by the prompt.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is generally good, but there are instances where the order of the process could be better organized. Consider using more explicit sequencing language to improve coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
The essay demonstrates good use of vocabulary related to the process of making tomato ketchup. To enhance lexical resource, try to incorporate a wider range of specific vocabulary related to the ketchup production process.
grammatical range
The grammar and sentence structures in the essay are mostly accurate. However, to improve grammatical range, try incorporating a variety of complex and compound sentences to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical structures.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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