Some people think parents should control the behaviour of children from a very young age but others think we should give them more freedom. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Dear whom it may concern,
First
of all, I would like to say thank you to all of the admission and academic team from Massey University who supported my son during the enrolment and choosing courses. Unfortunately, because of the
unpredictable
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unpredictability
of the nCoV-19 pandemic, until now, we have not received any information regarding the VISA process.
Therefore
, there is some foreseen risk that my son has to deal with if having no student VISA. The Vietnamese University Entrance Exam is coming soon with the significant pressure that he has to shoulder. He just cannot stand in between with vague opportunities.
Consequently
, he decided to postpone the
second
part of the Foundation Year at Massey University and keep on going
to
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into
the
first
year of Vietnamese University. Please kindly withdraw his name from the
enrollment
list and keep the records of his
first
part
in
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of
the Foundation Year at Nguyen Sieu School, we plan to come back to Massey University when he finishes his
first
year in Vietnam. Even my son sets
in
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on
his way of studying in New Zealand, the situation now has changed, we cannot put all eggs in one basket. 18 years old is an important milestone in his
study
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student
career and again, we cannot miss another boat. Please kindly advise me the procedure of withdrawing and refunding
tuition fee
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tuition fees
the tuition fee
based on Massey University's regulations. Thank you very much and looking forward to hearing from you soon. Sincerely, THAI BA HIEN's mother - NGUYEN TO TAM
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