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Human activity has had negative impact on plants and animals around the world. Some people think that this cannot be changed, while others believe actions can be taken to bring about a change. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Living and the non living things constitute our
environment
.Human activity has a huge impact on our
environment
.The 21st century is an era of constant developments.Humans are constantly modifying the
environment
 around them in
order
 to meet their economic requirements and social status in the society.
For example
,
Accept space
,
the
indeginious
originating where it is found
indigenous
 people are constantly displaced from their area in
order
 to build new dams and factories to meet the economic criteria in
order
 to survive in the society.
This
 displacement has
further
 led to the displacement of wild animals living in those areas.The animals are kept in wildlife
sancturies
a consecrated place where sacred objects are kept
sanctuaries
 which has a negative impact on their mental health.The animals who used to
rome
move about aimlessly or without any destination, often in search of food or employment
roam
room
run
 freely in the forest are now locked up in a cage which has led to depression and anxiety amongst them.A lot of plants which were grown around the areas are now cut down leading to loss of plant reserves in our country.The deforestation has led to a low air index and has made the area more polluted. The birds who used to live in trees have now lost their home and are searching for new homes.The setting up of towers by cutting down trees has led to loss of habitat and
affecing
arousing affect
affecting
 the animals and birds of those areas.We humans have to bring certain changes in our
activites
any specific behavior
activities
 in
order
 to save the animals and plants of the world.Various activists have come forward in
order
 to save plants.
For example
 THE CHIPKO MOVEMENT which
waa
have the quality of being; (copula, used with an adjective or a predicate noun)
was
 led by SUDHA BANERJEE was one of the most popular
one
Suggestion
ones
 in which people used to hug trees saving them from cutting down by the
industralist
someone who manages or has significant financial interest in an industrial enterprise
industrialist
industrialists
. Various other movements have been led out by various nationalist and activists around the world.We need to change our
attitutes
a complex mental state involving beliefs and feelings and values and dispositions to act in certain ways
attitudes
 towards our
environment
 so that we can save our future and save our mother earth before
its
it is
it's
 too late.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • negative impact
  • extinct
  • deforestation
  • pollution
  • habitat destruction
  • mitigate
  • reverse
  • stricter regulations
  • protected areas
  • endangered species
  • education and awareness campaigns
  • biodiversity
  • consequences
  • renewable energy sources
  • organic farming
  • eco-tourism
  • environmental regulations
  • sustainable practices
  • natural ecosystems
  • preserve biodiversity
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