YOU HAVE DECIDED TO LEAVE YOUR CURRENT JOB AND LOOK FOR A NEW ONE. WRITE A LETTER TO A FRIEND. IN YOUR LETTER. • EXPLAIN WHY YOU WANT TO LEAVE YOUR CURRENT JOB • WHAT KIND OF JOB YOU ARE LOOKING FOR • ASK FOR SOME HELP OR ADVICE.

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teacher for 10 years, during

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course for 8 years. I enjoy working there but I need to make more money,

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time to get to work or move from home. I would like to receive your help to find a good position as

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since I have been working for much time in the same school, I do not know what else I should demonstrate to get a better position. I look forward to your response and I thank you in advance. Best wishes, Fernanda Valeriano

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

187 words

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You are working in a company and you have decided to leave your current employment. Write a letter to your employer. In your letter: Explain why you are leaving. Explain why you have decided to leave your company. Tell your employer what you plan to do after leaving your present employment.

In many countries the proportion of older people is increasing. Could this have more positive or negative effects on society?

Many children are encouraged by their parents to get a part-time job in their free time. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it's effect on a child.