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The quality of life in large cities is decreasing. What could be the reasons behind this? What measures can be taken to resolve this problem.

#quality #life #cities #measures
Nowaday
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Nowadays
, life in a metropolitan
cities
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city
 is extremely hectic.
Their
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There
 are several
aspect
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aspects
 behind restless lifestyle.
Hence
this
 essay will discuss few
cause
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causes
 behind it and
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 ideas to prevent problems for
indivdual
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individuals
individual
the individual
an individual
.
First
 and foremost, one of
major reasons
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the major reasons
 is increasing in traffic
.
Accept space
.
 Since the culture in most urban area
incudes
have as a part, be made up out of
includes
 corporate jobs,
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 between home and
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 in common which generate enormous
amout
a quantity of money
amount
 of traffic
.
Accept space
.
 Due to
this
,
presious amout
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the precious amount
precious amout
a precious amount
precious amount
presious amount
 of time
get
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gets
 wasted.
For
example individual
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example, individual
 living in Delhi and working in Cybercity Gurgram spends approximately 4hrs daily while
travling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to work, which he or she can use for
productive
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production
 work.
Secondly
, due to
increse
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the increase
increase
increases
 of private
trasnportation
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
, pollution in these mega cities
also
 growing rapidly. Living in skyline area is
also
 harming the health of the plethora of people
,
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,
 individual can be seen wearing
facemask
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face mask
 all the time in public places, to prevent inhaling of smog
.
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.
according
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According
 to the
servay
consider in a comprehensive way
survey
, Delhi ranks in top 10 polluted
country
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countries
 capitals around the world. As a solution, Odd-Even formula can be applied for privately
owend
having an owner; often used in combination
owned
vehicals
a conveyance that transports people or objects
vehicles
, so that there will be less traffic on roads as well as, it will
also
 help in
controling
able to control or determine policy
controlling
 the pollution rate around the cities. Which can improve the basic lifestyle. To conclude,
cities
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city
 lifestyle can be upgraded with the help of strict rules, and if citizen
contribute
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contributes
 effectively to save natural resources and prevent pollution.
Submitted by varun arora on

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