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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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It's suggested that self-study more effective than working with supervisors,
However
, Others state that teachers are the best mentor and their knowledge, techniques will enable us to learn material quickly. In
this
 following paragraph I will discuss both sides of learning. Self-learning develops human intelligence in various fields to advance. Learning by doing is an approach, which has long lasting and undeniable benefits. People in favour of self-study think that when people learn by themselves, it becomes more unique and
hence
 the brain catches it more effectively.
However
, When a person tries to learn new material, he doesn't feel tension and stress
on the contrary
, it helps to master quickly.
For example
, it has a negative side as most of people have an inflated sense of our own intelligence, which causes issues when they try to study alone.
Thus
, self-learning can provide knowledge
,
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however, its
 have their drawbacks. Studying with
a
Suggestion
an
 assistant helps us to stay focused and avoid distractions, which are two things that people today often struggle with. A professor can help the students by correcting their mistakes and
also
 providing feedback. Teachers are knowingly afforded complex materials as it improves thinking and wit.
For instance
, One
third
 of the students entered the institute due to tutor training, as
this
 gives more chances to engage and the student would have effective learning in minimal time span. In fact, Teachers are the best source for obtaining quality, knowledge and professionals in their sphere. To Conclude, I strongly believe that studying with an instructor is better than studying by themselves. It gives us feedback by side of tutor and solve problems in the process of studying.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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