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More and more people these days work harder and longer hours and have no time for family life and friends. What are the causes in your opinion for this? How is it affecting family life and the society as a whole?

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Nowdays
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Now days
 people are working harder more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
 ever and have long working hours.
as
Suggestion
As
this
 has negatively affected their social
life
 and relationship status.
this
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This
 essay will discuss the following factors causing
this
 situation. For a number of reasons people are working hard these days as
this
 can be seen from their long working hours.
firstly their
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Firstly, there
Firstly their
Firstly there
firstly there
 is tough working competition as for a single job position thousands of people are
competiting
compete for something; engage in a contest; measure oneself against others
competing
 and private companies are firing their
employes
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employers
 due to performance issues.
further
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Further
 business competition
are increasing
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is increasing
 so the organizations are fixing higher targets, big budgets.
due
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Due
 to
this
 the working volume tends to
increase so
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increase, so
employes
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employers
employed
 are forced to do more
work
 taking more hours.
secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
, we are living in a that society where people are respected based on their assets and property so people
work
 more hours or
work
 overtime
to achieve
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to achieve all this
this
 all. In todays
world people
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world, people
 choose to
work
 more as it has negatively affected the family and social
life
.
in
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In
 many of the case parents abandon their children due to working condition, some of the
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
are feel
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are feeling
have felt
feel
 ignored due to which
they they
people in general
they
 have several health issues, many of them get addicted to video games, even drugs or with bad company.
in
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In
 many
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 cases long working hours
has seriously affected
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have seriously affected
 the relationship status of many young couples as many of them are unable to take time for their spouses.
as
Suggestion
As
this
 lack proper interaction between them due to
this
divorse
the legal dissolution of a marriage
divorce
 rate had increased in certain years.
furthermore family
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Furthermore, family
Furthermore family
 ties are not very strong as they used to be.
now
Suggestion
Now
 people are living a sedentary lifestyle due to their long working hours they are having very
unhealty
not in or exhibiting good health in body or mind
unhealthy
 diet and they are moving less outdoors. In
conclusion it
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conclusion, it
 is true that people are more determined towards
there
of them or themselves
their
work
 on the one
hand i
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hand, I
hand I
 could understand as
this
is due to tough
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is tough due to
competition but
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competition, but
 many people does not understand that it is affecting
there
of them or themselves
their
 social and family
life
 due to which depression and
divorse
the legal dissolution of a marriage
divorce
 rate has increased.
as
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As
 personally
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 should believe that there should be
balance
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a balance
 between
work
 and
there
of them or themselves
their
they're
life
.
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