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The given diagram provides information about the process by which
cement
 and concrete are produced. Overall, it requires 6 steps and a number of tools to manufacture
cement
 from crushing limestone and clay to packing into bags. Meanwhile, there are 4 materials and a mixer in order to make concrete. The
first
 step to produce
cement
 is to put limestone and clay into a crusher by which these two materials are crushed into powder. Once the crushed powder has been put into a mixer, it
then
 goes through a rotating
heater which
Accept comma addition
heater, which
 has constant heat at one end of the tube. At
this
 point the resulting mixture is ground in order to make fine
cement
 before being packed into bags. Regarding the
second
 diagram, concrete consists of 4 mainly gravel which accounts for 50 % of the ingredients. The other materials used to make
concreate
a strong hard building material composed of sand and gravel and cement and water
concrete
are
introduces an alternative
or
 sand,
cement
, and water with the proportion of 25%, 15% and 10 %, respectively. These four materials are put into a mixture which continually rotates to combine the material and eventually produce concrete.
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