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Governments around the world spend too much money on treating illness And diseases and not Enough on health education and prevention.Do agree or disagree?

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Many have observed that governments in the different parts of the world have used public fund chiefly for the diseases rather than giving awareness or intercepting the illnesses spreading to the society.I disagree with
this
 statement due to the fact that authorities in many countries prioritise
health
care
 as main agenda for a healthy society which should reflect the progress of a
nation
.
Health
Suggestion
The health
 of the citizens of a
nation
 should be the fundamental factor of a thriving society
.
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.
Therefore
,
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many countries have quintessential
health
care
 systems which
enables
Suggestion
enable
 their citizen to utilise the maximum benefit out of it irrespective of the financial conditions of them.
For instance
, countries
such
 as the United Kingdom is the epitome of
health
care
 system which provides the free
health
care
 not only to all their nationals, but
also
 to the immigrants,
as a result
this
 would be one of the influencing factors many chooses to immigrate to the United Kingdom.
Thus
, accelerate the Human Resource which would eventually evident in the productivity of a
nation
. .Fundamentally
,
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many governments have contributed to a major portion of the annual budget to the studies and research in the field of science and technology which enable to find the cutting edge medicines and equipments. Many anecdotes and longitudinal studies prove that effective healthcare system would apparently halt or remove the deadly diseases.
Therefore
 the many vaccines and medicines have cured and wiped out deadly illnesses
such
such
 as plague, cholera
,
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,
Ebola
Moreover
,
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 the prevention measures and awareness campaigns of authorities could minimise the severity of the illnesses. To illustrate
this
,
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In India government has taken effective measures and prompt actions have helped to prevent the recent pandemic Covid 19
hence
 many fatalities have avoided in a large scale compared to the other countries. In conclusion,many argue that governments consume the money when
health
 or medical contingency occurred
however
 in my opinion all over the world government establishments spend large amount of money in the field of
health
care
 as a priority owing to the fact that
health
 of their citizen would be the back bone of stable economy and development of any
nation
.
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