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Some people say that modern innovations bring a lot more problems than benefits. Do you agree or disagree?.

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Technology has developed widely in the recent decades. These people claim that
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new
 developments are
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more problematic
 rather than beneficial.
This
 essay will argue that modern innovations are entirely required despite some potential risks. Modern technology results in various issues. One of the main
problem
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problems
 is
pollution which
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pollution, which
 is caused due to improper disposal of these technical and electrical equipments or machines.
Secondly
, human relations are impaired by some advanced technologies.
For instance
, it has been reported that most of the water resources in India are polluted due to the disposal of bulk digital equipments which never degrade neither in water nor soil.
Additionally
, if people had direct face to face communication
,
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,
 emotional insecurity and misunderstanding could never
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have
 risen. These can be a few in many negative impacts of the advanced technology on humans as well as nature. Despite fewer problems, the idea that modern discoveries create problems is completely preposterous. These technologies
has made
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have made
 life easier by faster processing of programmes. As an example, communicative method is improved from telegram and telephone to high speed internet services.
Moreover
, newer scientific technology has made life easier for patients by providing immediate health reports using advanced equipments. The benefits that modern innovations possess far outweighs the long-term problems they would result in.
This
 essay argued that people who are against these innovations have a flawed understanding and their idea is ill- informed and unsatisfying. In my opinion
,
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,
 these modern innovations are absolutely imperative
that is
 entirely justified.
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