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Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that t should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both sides.

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Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is useless.They do think that mathematics is not a wroth
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
subject
. As there is no scope in maths. While
on the other hand
 parents thing that maths is a foundational
subject
 and its very important. They do things that if you don't want to make a scope in maths
then to you must
Suggestion
then you must
 study it because its the basic and basics should be clear. I thing so that the parents saying that maths
subject
 should be redundant from school are wrong. As we know that maths is a basic
subject
. As it includes a lot of basic calculation.We
also
 know that maths and its calculation are very much useful to us in our routine lifestyle. Maths
also
 includes some fundamental which are very important in our life. While on the other parents arguing that maths is important
subject
 and should must be taught in the schools. I thing so that these parents are true as they know maths is the basic fundamental
subject
. They are
also
 saying that if it's not useful to us later on
then
 to we should study maths just because to clear our fundamental and we can do some basic calculation. So I do agree with the parents saying that maths should be taught, whether it's useful to us later on or not.
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