Film stars and music celebrities may earn a great deal of money and live in luxurious surroundings, but many of them lead unhappy lives. Do you agree? To what extent is this the price they pay for being famous?

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We may perceive that famous people

such

as film stars or idols not only have a happy life with a smile on their face, but

also

have a high income to buy everything they want.

However

, what harder than becoming famous is being famous. We always see in a bright side, but what about the other side we did not see? What is the price for being famous that they are trying to hide underneath their smile?

First

of all, the

first

thing to pay for being famous is privacy. Once you become famous, your life is not only yours anymore. Everyone will have a right to know where are you in your weekend, who do you have a relation with or even what do you think about some recent problems.

For example

, if you are now a new face Rockstar and in a middle of going out with your girlfriend to have a meal, everyone has a right to know

this

and can interpret you any time to have your

sign

Suggestion

signature

on their stuff.

Consequently

, since your business is not just yours anymore, people can criticize you anyways they want. If they do not like how you act or what you say, they can always judge you no matter how small the problem is.

For example

, if you are a popular

celebity

a widely known person

celebrity

on the internet and today you are eating a pizza with ketchup, they can blame you for just eating a pizza with ketchup anyways they want and

that is

your problems not them. Conclusion, every well-known people have to pay their privacy and the right for everyone to criticize them in everything in exchange for being popular. The more they are becoming famous, the less privacy life they have.

However

, if they can live with it, being famous is not that bad.

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