Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What effects will this have on society?

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The majority of offenders effectuate

further

misdeeds as soon as

immuned

relating to the condition of immunity

immune

from jail. There could be several reasons for

this

and I consider it to be

negative trend

Suggestion

a negative trend

for society. The most important reason here can be

prison

environment. Obviously there is no

good

Suggestion

better

environment for a

people

Suggestion

person

prison

Accept space

because everyone is a criminal in

prison

. They will become more and more insane in

prison

, and they become very savage and violent.

For example

, a person who escapes from

prison

commits another crime because he does not

conclusion

Suggestion

conclude

from his previous crime, because stays among with criminals for a long time and his brain poisoned.

In addition

, some offenders commit crimes after release because they

also

have

family

Suggestion

families

a family

and cannot find work after that and cannot money to support their family after release.

For example

, most workplaces do not criminalize detainees and treat them with contempt.

Therefore

, many criminals commit crimes again.

This

mentioned crimes may lead to negative

consequance

a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon

consequences

in our social life, I believe.

Firstly

, people lose their joy and

also

the

state

becomes troubled when the number of criminals increases. An example of

this

is the

state

of Iraq, which is

also

a troubled country due to the large number of criminals in the country.

Secondly

majority

Suggestion

the majority

a majority

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

join criminal when they are young.

As a result

, the

state

will face a crisis in the future, cause of

this

the

state

will

lack

Suggestion

lacks

intelligent and educated children. To conclude, due to

prison

environment and non- employment of imprisoned people lead to recidivism.

Iconsider

Suggestion

I consider

it to result badly on to the peace of society and

people

Suggestion

the people

Also

it can lead children astray.

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Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What effects will this have on society?

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