Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What effects will this have on society?

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The majority of offenders effectuate

further

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misdeeds as soon as

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relating to the condition of immunity

immune

from jail. There could be several reasons for

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and I consider it to be

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a negative trend

for society. The most important reason here can be

prison

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environment. Obviously there is no

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better

environment for a

people

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person

prison

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Accept space

because everyone is a criminal in

prison

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. They will become more and more insane in

prison

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, and they become very savage and violent.

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, a person who escapes from

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commits another crime because he does not

conclusion

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conclude

from his previous crime, because stays among with criminals for a long time and his brain poisoned.

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, some offenders commit crimes after release because they

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have

family

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families

a family

and cannot find work after that and cannot money to support their family after release.

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, most workplaces do not criminalize detainees and treat them with contempt.

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, many criminals commit crimes again.

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mentioned crimes may lead to negative

consequance

a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon

consequences

in our social life, I believe.

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, people lose their joy and

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the

state

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becomes troubled when the number of criminals increases. An example of

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is the

state

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of Iraq, which is

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a troubled country due to the large number of criminals in the country.

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majority

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the majority

a majority

childrens

a young person of either sex

children

join criminal when they are young.

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, the

state

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will face a crisis in the future, cause of

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the

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will

lack

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lacks

intelligent and educated children. To conclude, due to

prison

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environment and non- employment of imprisoned people lead to recidivism.

Iconsider

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I consider

it to result badly on to the peace of society and

people

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the people

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it can lead children astray.

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Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What effects will this have on society?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

With growing number of populations in cities, many people are living in small homes that don't have outdoor spaces. Is this a positive or negative development?

Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individuals do?

Some people believe that teenagers should always follow the example of the older people. Others believe that teenagers should question what older people say. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In some countries, many more people are choosing to live alone nowadays than in the past. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?