Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What effects will this have on society?

The majority of offenders effectuate
further
misdeeds as soon as
immuned
relating to the condition of immunity
immune
from jail. There could be several reasons for
this
and I consider it to be
negative trend
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a negative trend
for society. The most important reason here can be
prison
environment. Obviously there is no
good
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better
environment for a
people
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person
in
prison
,
Accept space
,
because everyone is a criminal in
prison
. They will become more and more insane in
prison
, and they become very savage and violent.
For example
, a person who escapes from
prison
commits another crime because he does not
conclusion
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conclude
from his previous crime, because stays among with criminals for a long time and his brain poisoned.
In addition
, some offenders commit crimes after release because they
also
have
family
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families
a family
and cannot find work after that and cannot money to support their family after release.
For example
, most workplaces do not criminalize detainees and treat them with contempt.
Therefore
, many criminals commit crimes again.
This
mentioned crimes may lead to negative
consequance
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
consequences
in our social life, I believe.
Firstly
, people lose their joy and
also
the
state
becomes troubled when the number of criminals increases. An example of
this
is the
state
of Iraq, which is
also
a troubled country due to the large number of criminals in the country.
Secondly
,
majority
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the majority
a majority
of
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
join criminal when they are young.
As a result
, the
state
will face a crisis in the future, cause of
this
the
state
will
lack
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lacks
intelligent and educated children. To conclude, due to
prison
environment and non- employment of imprisoned people lead to recidivism.
Iconsider
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I consider
it to result badly on to the peace of society and
people
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the people
.
Also
it can lead children astray.
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