Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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It is true that nowadays children spend much

time

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in front of the

television but

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television, but

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the tv

is not learning tool as

book

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the book

as. While I completely agree with

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time

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is being wasted to watching television, I believe that

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programmes contributes to education as well. On the one hand

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children tend to

watcht

look attentively

watch

television rather than to read books because

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is more comfortable for children.

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is not an efficient as books and

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leads children are

less well

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less good

-educated today.

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example there

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example, there

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every

childrens

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children's

house and parents do work a lot in

contemporary world

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the contemporary world

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to mean children are being ignored from parents and developed technology are attracting

children

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children, such

such

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telephone and computer.

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however they

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However, they

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cannaot

can not

cannot

replace the book as

learning tool

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a learning tool

learning tools

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is a good

way

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to attract children in front of the

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.Young boys and girls watch

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than elder people. And nowadays

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proggrammes

an announcement of the events that will occur as part of a theatrical or sporting event

programmes

programs

are developed

to give lesson

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to give a lesson

for children and they interested in

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channels namely

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channels, namely

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English for kids and

english

an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries

English

catoons

soft silky fibers from cotton plants in their raw state

cottons

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these

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These

channels contribute and focus on

children

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children's

education.

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example parents

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example, parents

are seeking

easy

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an easy way

way

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to enhance their

children

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child's

children's

education and

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is one of the best

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way

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ways

to spend children’s

time

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to watching different programmes. In conclusion,

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does not compensate as books the precious

time

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of children

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children, but

but it is a good

way

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to teach children by online

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3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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235 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Educational tool
Documentaries
Passive consumption
Critical thinking
Imagination
Attention span
Literacy skills
Screen time
Parental guidance
Digital materials
Interactive learning
Multimedia resources
Cognitive development
Reading comprehension
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Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television cannot replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well‐educated today. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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