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Some people prefer online classes , while others think it is better to be in a traditional classroom. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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Technology has changed every aspect of life, including the method is learning and teaching. In the 21st century, it is possible to earn a degree online and pursue a professional career without going to a school or a university.
However
, I believe that,
internet
 based programs are influencing today's time, but is inferior to already established classrooms. Online classes are cheap and affordable for most students around the world, which is considered to the major advantage for the fondness of online programs. People can educate themselves at their ease and comfort, without worrying about a fixed learning schedule.
Additionally
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Additionally, internet
internet
 has made it possible for learners and teachers to find each other more certainly and conveniently.
For instance
, a student who wants to learn Russian language, can find a Russian tutor online and learn from her home. She is not required to find an institution in her country, nor she has to travel to learn the language. Brick and mortar classrooms, on the flip side are preferred by a number of candidates who love competitive ambiance and learning atmosphere of the classroom. Traditional lecture halls,
however maintain
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however, maintain
 a disciplined environment for students, keeps them motivated along with regular work evaluations and personal feedbacks.
Furthermore
, I believe that, distractions are real problems faced by the a lot of learners. A traditional lecture room aids students to not get distracted, helps in focusing and learning efficiently. In conclusion, modern technology is definitely helping and improving today's learning process, but is
also
 damaging already established educational programs/methods. That being said, the opportunities over
internet
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the internet
 are endless, both students and teachers can benefit from the power of
internet
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the internet
.
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