Some young people believe it's best to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, while others wish to live in their hometowns their whole lives. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Some young people prefer to move out of their home town in a bid to explore other towns and make the best out of it in different areas
such
as career social
life
business sports most young people believe that leaving your comfort zone is a means of discovering other opportunities that might be beneficial to him or her a great deal in the nearest future.
on
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On
the other
hand some
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hand, some
young adults wish to live in their
hometown
all their lives probably because they are so community inclined
therefore
they believe remaining in their
hometown
wont
will not
won't
make them
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
touch of their culture and
believes
any cognitive content held as true
beliefs
.
also
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Also
living in your
hometown
your whole
life
gives a sense of belonging and acceptance without having to worry about adapting to a new culture or way of
life
in another town. My candid opinion is that it
isto
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is to
move out of your town to somewhere else to learn about different cultures and approach to
life
and way of doing things.
new
used of a living language; being the current stage in its development
New
experiences
makes
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make
one versatile and knowledgeable.
Plus you
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Plus, you
never can tell what enormous opportunities
lies
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lie
out there
untill
up to, before the time
until
you
moveout
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move out
from
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of
your
hometown
.
experince
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An experience
Experience
The experience
Experince
they say is the best teacher and as long as a human being is alive,
continous
continuing in time or space without interruption
continuous
learning is key one of the ways of learning is leaving where you are
to
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in
other places
this
way you can get
first
hand knowledge.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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