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there is information in UAE government spending in 2000. the total budget was AED 315 billion. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The pie chart illustrates the information on UAE
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 spending in 2000. Overall, social security has the highest figure and the transport has the lowest figure. As we can see, the UAE
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 spent more than 300
billion
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 AED in total. Social security cost the highest
budget
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 and it takes 100
billion
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 AED. Health and personal social services required more than 53
billion
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 was the
second
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 largest
budget
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 for the UAE
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
 in 2000. UAE used 338
billion
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 for education, 17
billion
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 for law and order, more than 2 million with the
budget
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 for industry, agriculture and employment.
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 the other hand, the money for defence, other expenditure and debt interest were the same, about 23
billion
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.
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, the lowest
budget
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 spent by UAE was transport, only 9
billion
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.
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