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Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #students #schools #children #skills #adult #life
School
life
 is like
first chapter
Suggestion
the first chapter
 in everyone's
life
 which is very important and sculp us as a human being. Some parents prefer single-
sex
 schools like girls
school
 or boys
school
 to join their kids because of various reasons. They think
this
 can improve their children's academic performance, but others argue that children from the co-education schools will obtain more social skills than others. I completely agree with their argument and I will provide a real
life
 example as well. As a kid or a teenager, it is the best time to learn anything about
life
 and society. Mixed schools teach for two genders in the same class.
This
 provides interaction between two genders and it is
also
 a great opportunity to know about opposite
sex
.
This
 builds your behaviour and teaches how to treat other
gender
. It
also
 brings up a chance of great friendship, how respect other
gender
 and to understand a minute difference between good and bad.
This
 will help in the future for being a successful person as socially and personally. A lot of parents think that mixed education may cause distractions and
sex
 abuse, but in ground reality, children who studied in single
sex
 schools are more victims of these because they don't know how to deal with those types of situations and they treat other genders as aliens. There will be
a
Suggestion
an
 obvious difference between a person who studied in a single
sex
school
 and a person studied in co-education. Just think if you are a single kid without siblings and studied in a single
sex
school
 for 12 years and suddenly enter into a world where we have to
work
 with the opposite
gender
. It's really hard to understand or overcome fear to interact with others. It completely affects our social behaviour.
For example
, In my college one my friend was completed all his
school
 in single boys'
school
 and he doesn't know how to talk with the other
gender
 and afraid of facing them. It affected his project
work
 as well where he got to
work
 with the opposite
gendergender
Suggestion
gender gender
. That group performed very poorly in project
work
 because of lack of coordination.
This
 happens to many students or adults who completed their studies in single
sex
 schools. To conclude, it is really important to learn how to interact with the other
gendergender
Suggestion
gender gender
 and it should be taught from the early age from mixed education schools.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • minimize distractions
  • gender-related learning styles
  • tailored learning environment
  • sense of empowerment
  • underrepresented
  • bridge the gender gap
  • emulate real-world environments
  • promoting interactions
  • communicate and collaborate
  • break down gender stereotypes
  • mutual respect
  • inclusivity
  • well-rounded individuals
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