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With the development of social media, more and more youngsters are being allowed unsupervised access to the internet in order to meet and chat with friends which can lead to potentially dangerous situations. What solutions can you suggest to deal with this problem.

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There is no doubt that increasing the advent of technology, various youth are addicted
of
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to
 social media and they have used the
internet
 as a wrong way
as a result
that is
 difficult situations for the youngsters.
This
 essay will examine some ways to tackle
this
complication
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complicated
. There are several problems creates when youngsters spend precious time on social media. One main complication is that access to inappropriate content on
internet
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the internet
.
This
 is bad impact on youth's mind and
also
 effect on their life and study.
Secondly
, they do not focus on a study
that is
 the main problem issue of every youngster. Due to
this
 dispute, they loss their own carrier.
Thus
, parents should be properly taken care to own children so that youngsters make a good
carrier
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
 in upcoming life. Some of the solutions can be overcome with
this
 trouble.
Firstly
, parents or Gardiner's should be properly taken care to their children so that they do not spend too much time on
internet
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the internet
.
This
 issue is a play negative role in children Life. Parents can allow their children and un-intervened access to chat with their friends at the same time can be
monitor
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monitored
 the contents and contacts of their kids app. In conclusion, parents should exercise control on the media access by their kids as well as always take care of their content what they have watched when they use the
internet
.
This
 ensures that parents would overcome
this
 dispute.
Submitted by Ramandeep Kaur on

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