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In some countries in Europe, some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job. Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education. What should schools do to prepare students for the world of work?

Schools and universities, Aside from our parents
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 are responsible to nurture the skills and abilities of the children. Children from Europe, especially 11 or 13 years of aged goes to
school
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 in
order
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 for them to enhance their practical skills related to
job
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 application. But for some, they go to
school
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 to learn general academic
education
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.
This
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 will discuss about the practical ways of the academic institutions to prepare the children for the
world
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 of
work
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.
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, teachers are
one
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 of the most important people that can contribute to a child's
knowledge
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 and enhancement of skills. The schools and universities should consider hiring the best professional in
order
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 for them to provide not only better quality
education
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, but
also
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 a good set of values
that is
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 essential in the
work
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 field. For an instance, a well accomplished teacher from my middle
school
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 has greatly influenced me about how should I face fears and rejections especially when applying for my
first
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job
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. Being emotionally ready is
one
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 of the greatest lesson that I have gained through her. Great teachers are
one
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 the major influences in our
life
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.
Secondly
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, Students are being exposed to the real working
world
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 through
internships
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. The management of the
school
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 should provide best Schools and universities, Aside from our parents
,
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,
 are responsible for the
nurturement
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 of the skills and abilities of the children. Children from Europe, especially 11 or 13 years of aged goes to
school
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 in
order
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 for them to enhance their practical skills related to
job
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 application. But for some, they go to
school
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 to learn general academic
education
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.
This
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essay
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will discussed
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will discuss
 about the practical ways of the academic institutions to prepare the children for the
world
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 of
work
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.
Firstly
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, teachers are
one
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 of the most important
person
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people
 that can contribute to
children
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a child's knowledge
child's knowledge
children's knowledge
knowledge
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 and enhancement of skills. The schools and universities should consider hiring the best professional in
order
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 for them to provide not only better quality
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education but
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education, but
also
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good set
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a good set
 of values
that is
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 essential in
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work field
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the work field
. For an instance,
well accomplished teacher
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a well accomplished teacher
the well accomplished teacher
 from my middle
school
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 has greatly
influence
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influenced
 me about how should I face fears and rejections especially when applying for my
first
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job
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. Being emotionally ready is
one
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 of the greatest lesson that I have gained through her. Great teachers are
one
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 the major
influencers
a power to affect persons or events especially power based on prestige etc
influences
 in our
life
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.
Secondly
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, Students are being exposed to the real working
world
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 through
internships
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. The management of the
school
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 should provide
best set
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the best set
 of companies that can help the children prepare for their
future
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work
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. Based on Harvard Research Department, 88% of the students learn
life
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 practical skills, that they can use in their
future
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career
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, through their
internships
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.
Internships
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 exposed the children about the real working
world
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. To sum it
up,
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up this essay,
this
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have discussed
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has discussed
 the ways of the schools on providing ways to prepare the children for their
future
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 working
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career including
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career, including
 hiring the best professional and giving them
the good
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the best
 set of companies for their
internships
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.
Although
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, no can really prepare for our
it, schools can
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schools, it can
 impart some
knowledge
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 and skills that can help the children endure the problems that they might in their
future
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 working environment.
of
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Of
 companies that can help the children prepare for their
future
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work
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. Based on Harvard Research Department, 88% of the students learn
life
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 practical skills, that they can use in their
future
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career
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, through their
internships
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.
Internships
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 exposed the children about the real working
world
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. To sum it up
this
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essay
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, It discussed the ways of the schools on providing ways to prepare the children for their
future
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 working
career
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, including hiring the best professional and giving them the best set of companies for their
internships
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.
Although
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, no can really prepare for our schools, it can impart some
knowledge
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 and skills that can help the children endure the problems that they might in their
future
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 working environment.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • vocational training programs
  • curriculum
  • critical thinking
  • problem-solving
  • communication skills
  • career guidance
  • counseling
  • internships
  • apprenticeships
  • local industries
  • businesses
  • digital literacy
  • technological skills
  • entrepreneurship
  • innovation
  • financial literacy
  • budgeting
  • teamwork
  • collaboration
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