more and more people want to own items, such as cars, clothing, and other things, that are made by famous brands. What are the reasons for this? Do you think or it is a positive or negative development?

In modernization era, people are
more influence
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more influenced
more influential
by brand rather than actual quality. The brand has status symbol,
thus
, If anyone
accquired
gotten through environmental forces
acquired
trendy things that
person
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people
a person
will get more eye attention in their society or group. Honestly, That's distinguish
effect
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the effect
an effect
on personally and socially. There are many
cause
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causes
for people who are attracted
for
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to
popular products.
Firstly
, the
morden
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
advertisement has vital influence on public mindset. Those ads are
presenting
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presented
like a luxury items
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
buyer's current status. What's more, The innovative technologies would be viral
implemente
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impaired
impairment
on social group.
For example
, The Tesla, as known as best electric luxury car.
However
, the price of
product
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the product
is less than other luxury cars, but
publically
in a manner accessible to or observable by the public; openly
publicly
it's a dream car for almost everyone.
Additionally
, local government
has provide
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has provided
subsidies for buyer who wants
Tesla car
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a Tesla car
the Tesla car
. On the other side, famous brands are usually coming from developed
contries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
.
Thus
, In developing and undeveloped
contries
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
all citizens couldn't afford to buy that branded outfits and vehicles.
Moreover
, They
would be use
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would use
would be used
their local made clothes which would be less expensive and affordable,
also
that country's
economic
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economy
will be
increase
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increased
by time.
Lastly
, Middle class families
couldn't be afford
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couldn't afford
luxuries
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luxury
products. That's why, In these kind of
geographical economic
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geographical, economic
area would be profitable for branded outlets. To sum up, The popular products
gives
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give
royal
status
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The status
Status
to
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of
that person who wearing that
items
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item
.
Allthough
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Although
, the branded items would be affordable for wealthy families and developed nations.
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