Some people say that arts subjects such as painting or drawing should not be made compulsory for high school students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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modern era, world is changing a lot as compared to the past.
This
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is only possible because of the education and
techonologies
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
technologies
technology
. People have a negative thought regarding to the subject, which is related to the arts. I personally believe that every subject has its own importance. In the following paragraphs, I have some strong arguments to support my view.
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, some people think that painting
is not suppose
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is not supposed
to be
compelsary
required by rule
compulsory
in the school. They are saying
this
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thing because they are not aware of the importance of it. Even though every coin has two sides " one is positive while another is negative" and same
perinclple
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applies to the
evey
(used of count nouns) each and all of the members of a group considered singly and without exception
every
suject
the subject matter of a conversation or discussion
subject
. But the positive
effec t
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
of each course in
student's life
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a student's life
is much
more higher
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higher
than the negative result.
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, painting is very essential part of the writing and it is scientifically proven that. If children are good
in
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at
drawing
then
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they are excellent in writing naturally. Lectures on drawing are improving
human's thinking capacity
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the human's thinking capacity
and
visuable
relating to or using sight
visual
image. That's why every school must involve painting subject.
Moreover
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, drawing is more
importent
of great significance or value
important
for those students, who are trying to make their
fucture
the time yet to come
future
as a painter. In 2009, one government report shows that, 75 percentage
enginer
a person who uses scientific knowledge to solve practical problems
engineers
engine
and doctors who are
sucessful
having succeeded or being marked by a favorable outcome
successful
in their life, they were good in painting at their schooling time. There are
numerious
amounting to a large indefinite number
numerous
advantages of drawing. That's why
government
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the government
must have
try
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tried
to engage everyone in
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, by providing free classes on it and organising
competition
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a competition
the competition
on it. To conclude, drawing is really beneficial for the every student and I
am fully agree
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fully agree
have fully agreed
with it, only because of the excellent outcomes.
This
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is good for the society as well as for the country.
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