Some young people believe it's best to move out of their hometowns when they become adults, while others wish to live in their hometowns their whole lives. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

As a young person, attaining adulthood signifies the
begining
the event consisting of the start of something
beginning
of independence mostly because of the various cultural and moral lessons passed on by parents to their children while raising them. It connotes a period of responsibility and often at times
this
responsibility is often
miscontrued
interpret in the wrong way
misconstrued
for individuality, which should not be the case. Using my growing up as a case study, attaining adulthood for me was
beyound
farther along in space or time or degree
beyond
the legal
defination
a concise explanation of the meaning of a word or phrase or symbol
definition
, it was the moment when
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
believed and felt
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
could not only handle myself financially but
also
emotionally,
this
partially implies being able to fend for myself in entirety. The thing ism with
this
mentality of mine, the only way of proving to myself means
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
have to move out beyond the controlling leach of my parents
,
Accept space
,
however not
Accept comma addition
however, not
necessarily out of my hometown, but far enough to escape their watching eyes. Staying within the same home town is of
immence
unusually great in size or amount or degree or especially extent or scope
immense
benefit as the young adult is kind of given a soft landing and doesn't have to feel or deal with the burden of starting afresh, which comes with
alot
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a lot
of baggage. Familiar faces
,
Accept space
,
known places
,
Accept space
,
can
coming
Suggestion
come
handy as
this
stage is a milestone as well as an un-charted territory emotionally for the young adult. Leaving one's home town
have
Suggestion
has also proven
also
proven to be
quiet
to a degree (not used with a negative)
quite
beneficial to some young adults, especially for those that don't want to be seen and judged by the actions of their parents. Moving gives them an opportunity to start on
thier
of them or themselves
their
own terms and set
thier
of them or themselves
their
own
part
a course of conduct
path
, without fear of
such
.
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