We cannot help everyone is the world that needs help,so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries.

Vast majority

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The vast majority

of people think that we are not able to help every person who needs help in a global village.Because there are our own problems in our country.I completely disagree with

this

statement

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if people

can to help

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can help

someone they must help others as much as possible.

First

and foremost

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it is ipso-facto that I think people should help others regardless of race and nationality.In recent years

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some people became to does not care about

environment

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the environment

and ruthless.I believe that it is simple to give happiness to anyone if person want it,

such

as,if people have money more than enough for own self they should give some financial assistance to needy and who has any conditions or opportunities they could buy new home to homeless,at least,everyone can buy food to hungry people for feed the stomach and it does not matter where they stand own country or foreign cities. At the present time

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I believe that most of people helps to others out of their

humanity

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human

qualities and various states are extending a helping hand to each other.Due to COVID-19 in the world called on people to unite because half of society’s work has been suspended

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in consequence

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they

can not

cannot

earn money for

this

reason they are receiving financial support from rich people.In favour of

communicate

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communicating

countries each others organizations

helps

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help

too

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for

example UNICEF

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example, UNICEF

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UNICOM and EUROPEAN UNION to the poorest countries of Africa and other states. In conclusion

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unfortunately

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it is true that

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can not

cannot

help everyone.

However

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people should not stop from giving helps others and they must be kind to everyone

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especially those people who need to help.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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global interconnectivity
international cooperation
ethics
moral obligation
geographical borders
diplomatic relations
economic stability
global security
resource allocation
expertise
international aid
dependency and development
sustainable solutions
local and global initiatives
community resilience

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