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Some people believe that unpaid community service should be a compulsory part of high school program (for example working for a charity, improving the neighborhood or teaching sports to younger children).To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The bar graph describes
Production
 and
consumption
 of
electricity
 in most famous ten countries in 2014. Most
production
 of
electricity
 is proposition of 5.398
billion
 kWh in China and
also
consumption
 are of
electricity
 is same, percentage of 5.322
billion
kwh
a unit of energy equal to the work done by a power of 1000 watts operating for one hour
kWh
 in 2014. United States to follow China,
this
 country's
production
 of
electricity
's values that 4.099
billion
kwh
a unit of energy equal to the work done by a power of 1000 watts operating for one hour
kWh
,
consumption
 values that 3.866
billion
kwh
a unit of energy equal to the work done by a power of 1000 watts operating for one hour
kWh
. All countries
production
 of
electricity
 more than
consumption
 of
electricity
, while Germany has opposite situation. Canada, Brazil, France and Germany have similar worth of
production
 and
consumption
 of
electricity
.Approximately, 500
billions
Suggestion
billion
kwh
a unit of energy equal to the work done by a power of 1000 watts operating for one hour
kWh
.
Last country
Suggestion
The last country
 in the top ten counties is Korea,
electricity
 producing is nearly 485
billions
Suggestion
billion
kwh
a unit of energy equal to the work done by a power of 1000 watts operating for one hour
kWh
, while
consumption
 is approximately 450
billions
Suggestion
billion
kwh
a unit of energy equal to the work done by a power of 1000 watts operating for one hour
kWh
. Overall,
this
 bar chart gives information about in 2014
electricity
production
 and
consumption
 top ten countries in the world.
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