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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this. You should write at least 250 words.

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Nowadays people that have just completed the high school are invited to get a job or to do a period abroad before starting the
university
. It is a common advice, in several
countries especially
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countries, especially
 the western ones especially in western countries. A gap year could have both advantages and disadvantages. Considering the advantages, the clearest one is that spending a time of our life abroad in a different country with an unlike culture can give, especially to younger people, the possibility to become open-minded. It could be a great quality within the
university
 or in his place of work, where he could find foreign people.
Moreover
, working before the graduating process can help the students to become more mature and that could sustain the guy in face the new reality in which they are going to live.
Also
, it could be interesting to find a job abroad, as it can let the young boy or girl growing up more quickly than staying at home in their comfort zone. It is important not to forget the fact that living in a new country can give you the opportunity to learn a new language and new traditions to make new friends and to become more self-confident with the other. These are all qualities that either the new teachers or the employers will be looking for. Contrarily, one of the disadvantages that comes up to my mind is that both travelling or working between the end of the high school and the beginning of the
university
 could let
the young
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younger
 people lose the will start to study again.
because
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Because
 they have tried the emotion to feel independent, to gain own money, to have a personal home, to be
adult
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an adult
. Concluding, I believe that doing a gap year has more advantages than disadvantages but there is the need, for the graduated students, to be conscious that, after
this
 period of pause, they will must back to the
university
 and put all their efforts into their studies.
Submitted by Christian Barbarisi on

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