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People believe that being literate in English allows you to acquire better jobs and thus allows one to have access to a better standard of living. Up to what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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The table demonstrates the quantity of Ashdown
Museum
 visitors during the
year
 before and after it renovated while the chart illustrates the visitors survey result of their satisfaction with their
visit
 to the
museum
 by these two times. Overall, the amounts of people visited the
museum
 rose significantly over the
year
 of refurbishment and the very satisfied visitors were increased dramatically in the same
year
. In the
year
 before the refurbishment, there were only 72000 people visited the
museum which
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museum, which
 40% of them were dissatisfied with their
visit
 and it took the biggest part of visitor views about the
museum
.
However
, after refurbishment, visitors were increased significantly to the 92000 of the total visitors to 35 % of them were very satisfied with their
visit
 which increased from the initial percentages that were only 15%. Turning to the, the very dissatisfied visitors
were decrease
Suggestion
were decreasing
 gradually from 10% to 5%.
In contrast
, the people who are satisfied with their
visit
 increased from 30% to 40%. The
last
, the people who are not responding to the questionnaire survey remained constant in both
year
Suggestion
years
 at 5%.
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