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Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statemen

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Some people believe that tourists should accept social and
environmental
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Environmental
responsibility
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 while others believe that tourists
should
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Should
 not accept any
responsibility
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 at all. To what extent
do
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does
you
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You
 agree or disagree? There is no doubt in the given topic that few persons think that visitors should accept their duty regarding care of nature while
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
 think that tourist should free from any kind of
responsibility
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. I
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that it is
everyone
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everyone's
 duty to keep our natural
habitate
the type of environment in which an organism or group normally lives or occurs
habitat
 in good condition. In the following paragraphs
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 intend to put forth my view regarding the positive argument to support my side. To
begine
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
begin
bargain
 with,
tourisum
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
 is the big work nowadays, people from worldwide visits
diffrent
unlike in nature or quality or form or degree
different
 countries to see
haritage
practices that are handed down from the past by tradition
heritage
 and culture of that
place but
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place, but
 if they
star
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
start
 to harm that
habitate
the type of environment in which an organism or group normally lives or occurs
habitat
, it should be not good for that place.
In
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addition it
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addition, it
 is
duty
Suggestion
the duty
a duty
 of every tourist they do not through any litter in
rever
a large natural stream of water (larger than a creek)
rivers
,
Accept space
,
pound and
lake
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the lake
 and do not pluck any kind of
floura
an act that fails
failure
flour a
flora
flour
 from gardens where they visiting. To add more
in
Suggestion
to
 it, in some places
resorces
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
 are limited and demand is high because visitors
dont
do not
don't
 bother about that they thought if they are paying
then
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 they can
fullfill
put in effect
fulfil
fulfilled
 their
requirement
Suggestion
requirements
 in any cost.
for
Suggestion
For
 instant, on high altitude they demand hot water for bath two to three times in a
day but
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day, but
 peoples have limited
resorces
available source of wealth; a new or reserve supply that can be drawn upon when needed
resources
 there for that work because of low electric power
there they use
Suggestion
there, they use
 dry wood for making food
,
Accept space
,
washing clothes
ect
Suggestion
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
,
Accept space
,
some time people of that area welcome to
visistors
someone who visits
visitors
acording
(followed by 'to') in agreement with or accordant with
according
 to
threr
of them or themselves
their
budght but
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budget, but
budget but
this
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 is not good because every tourist are equal they
sepended
be contingent upon (something that is elided)
depended
suspended
 equal money to reach there so it is every one
responsibility
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 to give respect to all. In conclusion, It is
neccessory
absolutely essential
necessary
 for every
tourits
someone who travels for pleasure
tourist
tourists
 that they should respect and care of
floura
all the plant life in a particular region or period
flora
Gloria
floral
 and
founa
all the animal life in a particular region or period
fauna
.
and
Suggestion
And
also
Linking Words
 give respect to
culure
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
culture
 of visiting
place
Suggestion
places
, another thing is that local peoples
also
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 treat well to all visitors with heart.
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