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Some people say that economic development is necessary to reduce the poverty in the world. Others say that economic growth should be stopped immediately to stop damaging the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #development #poverty #world #growth #environment
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The pie chart
demonstres
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
demonstrates
therate
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the rate
 of the
avarage
approximating the statistical norm or average or expected value
average
 family
food
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 budget spending on home cooking meal and
restaurant
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 meal in the year 1970 to 2000, while the graph compares the
number
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 of
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food
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foods
 by fast
food
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restaurant
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 and sit-down
restaurant
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 at the same
period
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. Overall, the concern in spending budget on
restaurant
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 meal and the total of fast
food
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 that been consumed have increased significantly over the time
period
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. At the beginning, regarding to the chart, 90 % people spending their
food
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 budget for the home cooking meal and only 10 %
for
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of
 the
restaurant
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 meal.
However
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, The
restaurant
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 meal gained popularity and has been increased gradually less than a fifth
on
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in
 1980, more than a
third
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on
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in
 1990 and have the same percentage with the home-cooked meal at 50% by the end of
time
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the time period
period
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. Turning to, the
number
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 of meals that consumed from
fast
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a fast food restaurant
fast food restaurants
food
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restaurant
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 and sitting down
restaurant
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 are equal on 20
number
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 meal/year in 1970. The sitting down
restaurant
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 has
steady upward trend
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a steady upward trend
 for the following
years which
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years, which
 shows the value at about 25 in 1980, 40 in 1990 and around 45 by the end of
time
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the time period
period
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.
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in
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In
 contrast, the
number
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 of fast
food
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restaurant
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 has
slight
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slightly
 increased in the
first
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 ten years and it jumped up at about 90 by the end of year 2000.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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