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Some people say that economic development is necessary to reduce the poverty in the world. Others say that economic growth should be stopped immediately to stop damaging the environment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #development #poverty #world #growth #environment
The pie chart
demonstres
give an exhibition of to an interested audience
demonstrates
therate
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the rate
 of the
avarage
approximating the statistical norm or average or expected value
average
 family
food
 budget spending on home cooking meal and
restaurant
 meal in the year 1970 to 2000, while the graph compares the
number
 of
food
Suggestion
foods
 by fast
food
restaurant
 and sit-down
restaurant
 at the same
period
. Overall, the concern in spending budget on
restaurant
 meal and the total of fast
food
 that been consumed have increased significantly over the time
period
. At the beginning, regarding to the chart, 90 % people spending their
food
 budget for the home cooking meal and only 10 %
for
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of
 the
restaurant
 meal.
However
, The
restaurant
 meal gained popularity and has been increased gradually less than a fifth
on
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in
 1980, more than a
third
on
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in
 1990 and have the same percentage with the home-cooked meal at 50% by the end of
time
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the time period
period
. Turning to, the
number
 of meals that consumed from
fast
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a fast food restaurant
fast food restaurants
food
restaurant
 and sitting down
restaurant
 are equal on 20
number
 meal/year in 1970. The sitting down
restaurant
 has
steady upward trend
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a steady upward trend
 for the following
years which
Accept comma addition
years, which
 shows the value at about 25 in 1980, 40 in 1990 and around 45 by the end of
time
Suggestion
the time period
period
.
in
Suggestion
In
 contrast, the
number
 of fast
food
restaurant
 has
slight
Suggestion
slightly
 increased in the
first
 ten years and it jumped up at about 90 by the end of year 2000.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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