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completing university education is thought by some to be best way to get a job. On other hand, other people think that getting a job and developing soft skill is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion?

#university #education #job #hand #people #skill
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Is education is important than gaining a professional practice?
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 most people think to pursue higher studies to get better
job
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 placement, while others assume that gaining practice and developing technical skills are top priority.
This
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 essay will discuss why gaining a
degree
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 has a benefit, but why getting a
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work
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worker
 training and learning new techniques is more beneficial. On one side, most parents think that pursuing higher discipline is important to get a better profession.
Traditionaly
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Tradition
Traditionally
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 with the experiences of parents
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 as having a university learning is the minimum criteria to get a
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 in better companies.
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, In many corporate companies as the minimum eligibility to attend an interview is a post graduate or an at least a
degree
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. Higher degrees
are always accommodate
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are always accommodating
always accommodate
have always accommodated
 higher positions in most companies. On the flip side of the argument, why not to have profession early if you have an opportunity? In fact, having a
job
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 background and good technical skills are beneficial while after higher studies everyone tend to look for
a
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an
 assignment, in that case, if you could get a
job
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 why not to take it earlier? Additional having a practical industry involvement is more important than theoretically gaining a
degree
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. A recent survey by Harvard University proved that 80% of students and working professionals believe that gaining a
work
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 experience and skills are more important than holding a
degree
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 as nowadays getting a
degree
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 has become easy because of distance learning without wasting time.
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, working and learning skills are more important than a
degree
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. In conclusion, pursuing higher education or taking a
job
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 is always a controversial topic. Many want to pursue higher learning
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 some choose
work
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 and gain skills.
This
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 essay discussed in detail why some people choose to do higher education and others choose to have
good practical background
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a good practical background
the good practical background
. In my opinion, getting a good exposure to
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 environment and learning skills has more benefits than theoretical training.
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