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Some people say that sports play an important role in society. Others, however, think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that
sport
 is an indispensable part of our
life
, whilst others disagree and think it's just a physical activity.
This
 essay agrees that regardless of age and gender,
sport
 plays an important role in everyone's
life
. The following essay takes a look at both sides of the argument. It is clear that
sport
 has many shapes and styles from football, running, swimming to sky driving. Every country has their own favourite
sport
. For someone, it's just a game, but with many people it has become their
life
 and they can't live without it. Major sporting events attract millions of people from all around the world. It has provided the importance of
sport
 in human
life
. There is not
thing
Suggestion
a thing
 can backward
this
. In Vietnam,
for example
, when their national team wins, people go to the road to
greeting
Suggestion
greet
 and enjoying.
On the other hand
, with people who don't like
sport
, it is just a physical activity. They still play
sport but
Suggestion
sports, but
sports but
 for health purpose, not because they like it or have passion with it.
This
 not really too bad because
life
 has more than just
sport
, we have many others activities. People who spent all of their money on gambling
sport
 has made
sport
 become negative in many people's view. After
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 both sides of arguments, we can see that
sport
 has both negative and positive affect on people's
life
.
Sport
 is very
importance but
Suggestion
important, but
important but
 not the most important thing, it will be very good it be used right times and right places.
Submitted by Thanh Thuy on

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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