Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of fame an invasion into their private lives?

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Different people has different perspectives concerning the way media treat celebrities.Some of them think
privacy
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is equally needed by
everyone
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while others think fame comes at a certain price and
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to sacrifice your
privacy
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. From my point of view,
media
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the media
mostly breaches the
right
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of
privacy
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. I strongly believe that media should refrain itself from violating
privacy
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of celebrities.
Privacy
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is equally necessary for
everyone
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and it is unethical to pry into personal matters of anyone.
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,
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,
whether they are famous or
not
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not, everyone
everyone
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has the
right
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of
privacy
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and these rights are protected by law in many countries. Just because of the fact that they are famous personalities people can’t say that they don’t have private
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
.
Everyone
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should have private
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
as it’s a psychological need and the
right
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of
privacy
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should be protected by laws. It’s surprising that even
today some countries
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today in some countries
like Samoa, Afghanistan and Togo doesn’t have the
right
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of
privacy
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.
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, In
this
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technological age media has a huge power as it can reach almost all of us by using tools like television, newspapers, radio, magazines and as the most important one internet.
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Actually, this
this
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fact is very useful in our
lives but
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lives, but
sometimes media
takes
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take
advantage of
this
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huge power. Media exaggerates as far as possible while making news and it’s called media hype. It is unacceptable to use
such
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news for enhancing the ratings.The main purpose of the media should be making true news.
On the other hand
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, supporters of
media
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the media
think that celebrities don’t have private lives in the public sphere.
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Furthermore they
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Furthermore, they
even think that if they don’t go to places like famous restaurants they won’t be seen on cameras so they can have some private space.
This
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idea isn’t completely
right
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. All people
has
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have
have had
the
right
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of
privacy
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and just because they are famous
personalities their
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personalities, their
private lives can’t be restricted. Media should avoid invading
celebrities
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celebrity's
celebrities'
privacy
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. In conclusion,
privacy
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is equally needed by
everyone
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and it is a psychological need. Famous personalities
also
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have private lives and the line must be drawn between someone’s private and social life and media should avoid crossing
this
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line. News about private lives that are unnecessary for
community
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the community
is the violation of
privacy
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.
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