Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why this is a case and this can be done to attract more local people visit these places?

Without a doubt, there have always been local museums to preserve cultural and historical values of a locality.
However
, it is widely recognized that places like museums and historical sites are increasingly marginalized by other amusement venues. Reality proves that mostly international visitors are seen in local museums
instead
of the local people. While
this
development can be attributed to a number of reasons, I believe that the decline in local visitors to museums could be addressed by several viable solutions. On the one hand, the driving factors behind the declining attendance of local people at museums are definite.
First
and foremost, as the price for museum tickets is often prohibitively exorbitant, local residents may be unwilling to pay for one, especially when they may already know what are exhibited inside.
This
is,
however
, not the case for international tourists. Since some among them travel with the aim of gaining more insight into the cultural and historical heritage of localities, they are more inclined to afford an entry ticket to
museums
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the museums
where their quests should be fulfilled. Another rationale for the indifference towards museums and historical sites from the locals is that their interests in these venues are insufficiently stimulated. It could be said that the lack of events held in local museums is mainly to blame for how less and less local residents visiting museums.
On the other hand
, I am convinced that there are still a few ways in which local museums and historical sites could reclaim their reigns. For one, entry tickets to these amusement venues should be offered at a more reasonable price point.
Although
some may say
this
could do the museum owners a disservice since
earnings
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the earnings
from tickets are not enough to cover
maintenance cost
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maintenance costs
the maintenance cost
, I believe that
this
would be more than made up for by the
resurge
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resurgence
in local attendance. For another, more funding from the state could be allocated to museums and historical sites not only to renovate these
venues but
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venues, but
also to hold more
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also hold more
events in which local and
also
international visitors could gain more involved experience in history. In conclusion, while the fact that there are less and less local residents to pay visits to museums and historical sites and mainly foreign tourists are left to be attracted by, I believe that
this
could be dealt with should the aforementioned solutions are adopted.
Submitted by Thuan Tran on

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