Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Celebrities are often recognised for their stardom and affluence
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than their accomplishments and
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results in setting a detrimental example
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the youngsters. I completely agree
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view due to many reasons which will be discussed
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, future prospects of the young individual is negatively affected because they focus on the status of their favourite celebrity without having the knowledge of the hardships they went through in order to achieve a successful position and fall into the traps of depression because they link success to the outer appearance and possessions that results to failures in their
life
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in a run to attain comfort zone without any struggle.
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, they fail to understand that instant stardom does not
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long and are less likely to opt for hardships
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, young adults consider money and fame to be the key to success.
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is the reason why
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have millions of followers on their social networking accounts and the youngsters are the ones who follow their
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life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
and adapt to the materialistic environment by acquiring information about them. Not only that, they are even willing to buy a product endorsed by a celebrity
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As these juvenile lack experience they easily grasp these things in minds without knowing their
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background and look ahead to enjoy a luxurious
life
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which makes them money oriented rather gaining success through their own efforts or hardships. To conclude, I agree that famous
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personalities’
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take over
the mindset of young people who spoil their future by trying to imitate them and
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lead an unstable and unsuccessful
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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