Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Celebrities are often recognised for their stardom and affluence

afore

(old-fashioned) at or from or to a great distance; far

afar

affair

than their accomplishments and

this

results in setting a detrimental example

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for

the youngsters. I completely agree

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with

this

view due to many reasons which will be discussed

furthermore

this

essay.

Firstly

, future prospects of the young individual is negatively affected because they focus on the status of their favourite celebrity without having the knowledge of the hardships they went through in order to achieve a successful position and fall into the traps of depression because they link success to the outer appearance and possessions that results to failures in their

life

in a run to attain comfort zone without any struggle.

In other words

, they fail to understand that instant stardom does not

last

long and are less likely to opt for hardships

Secondly

, young adults consider money and fame to be the key to success.

This

is the reason why

celebutantes

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Celebutantes

have millions of followers on their social networking accounts and the youngsters are the ones who follow their

life style

a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes

lifestyle

and adapt to the materialistic environment by acquiring information about them. Not only that, they are even willing to buy a product endorsed by a celebrity

Accept space

As these juvenile lack experience they easily grasp these things in minds without knowing their

life

background and look ahead to enjoy a luxurious

life

which makes them money oriented rather gaining success through their own efforts or hardships. To conclude, I agree that famous

personality’s

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personalities’

takeover

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take over

the mindset of young people who spoil their future by trying to imitate them and

consequently

lead an unstable and unsuccessful

life

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wealth
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overshadow
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lifestyles
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promoting
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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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