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The plan illustrates the differences between
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the student room
room
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 for one
person
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 and student
room
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 for two people. Overall the rooms provide pretty much the same furniture for each
person
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, the differences are only the size of the
room
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 and the price. The price of 2 students
room
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 is $350/week, which is higher than 1 student
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room
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rooms
 that priced $200/week.
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, the price for each
person
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 is lower in the
room
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 with 2 students, which $25 cheaper, compared to a single
person
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room
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.
Room
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 for two is almost double the size of the
room
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 for one
person
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. Single
room
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 is equipped with 1 set of personal furniture, whilst the doubled
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 has twice in number.
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, the bigger
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 has a bookshelf, whereas the smaller
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 does not have one. A set of roundtable and 2 chairs
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 available in
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 for two people, whereas it is not available in the single
room
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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