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Many species of animals and plants are in danger of becoming extinct. What are the causes of this problem, and what can be done to prevent it from happening?

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The plan illustrates the differences between
student
Suggestion
the student room
room
 for one
person
 and student
room
 for two people. Overall the rooms provide pretty much the same furniture for each
person
, the differences are only the size of the
room
 and the price. The price of 2 students
room
 is $350/week, which is higher than 1 student
room
Suggestion
rooms
 that priced $200/week.
Nevertheless
, the price for each
person
 is lower in the
room
 with 2 students, which $25 cheaper, compared to a single
person
room
.
Room
 for two is almost double the size of the
room
 for one
person
. Single
room
 is equipped with 1 set of personal furniture, whilst the doubled
room
 has twice in number.
Moreover
, the bigger
room
 has a bookshelf, whereas the smaller
room
 does not have one. A set of roundtable and 2 chairs
also
 available in
room
 for two people, whereas it is not available in the single
room
.
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