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The Internet when used as a source of information, has more drawbacks than advantages. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#internet #source #information
Internet
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The internet
 is the most renowned
source
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sources
 for providing with
information
. It has associated with technology to make our life smooth and faster. In many
aspect
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aspects
, It just increased the accessibility to every sector. But many
believes
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believe
 that when
internet
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the internet
 used as a source of
information
, it has more drawbacks than advantages. I disagree with the statement.
Internet
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The internet
 is the most
marvelous
extraordinarily good or great; used especially as an intensifier
marvellous
 discovery of
20th century
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the 20th century
. Before
invention
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the invention
 of the
internet
 our life was more difficult than it is now. By using
internet
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the internet
 we can
retrive
get or find back; recover the use of
retrieve
 any
information
 within a few seconds. In every
sectors
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sector
 of our life we used
this
 invention immensely.
For example
, When a student needs any
information
 regarding
studies he
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studies, he
/she just used a browser to search about the content and can get
information
 about that specific content within a few moments. Its just
incresing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
 our working momentum with high speed. The biggest miracles of
internet
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the internet
 is its association with social media like
facebook
Suggestion
Facebook
,
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,
instagram
,
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,
whats
Suggestion
what's
 app
,
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,
twitter
a series of chirps
Twitter
 and so forth. Social media has brought
this
 world in our hand. By virtue of
this
 social media, We can make friends from any corner of the world. It's Not only help us by making
friends but
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friends, but
also
' it
has been providing
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has provided
 us with many useful
information
 about other countries. All of
this
 has become possible because of the
internet
. For Research
purpose we
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purposes, we
purposes we
 always need access to many
information
. All these
information
 cannot be gathered from one or two books. We might need several books to get the
information
 that we want. But By utilizing
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 we can get those
information
 within one
serach
try to locate or discover, or try to establish the existence of
search
 in the browser and there is no need to look over several books for the
information
.
Its
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It's
 one kind of time saving machine for use. Despite of having many advantages, It has a few drawbacks which are
negligable
so small as to be meaningless; insignificant
negligible
.
For instance
, Many people spend a lot of time on social media.
Moreover
, Before
invention
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the invention
 of the
internet
 people used to visit
library
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the library
a library
libraries
 to get their desired
information
. But after
advent
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the advent
 of the
internet
 the popularity of the library has
decreased which
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decreased, which
 literally limiting our knowledge levels.
Furthermore
, During searching moment, many
advertise
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advertises
 appears with the
information
 in the
webpage
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web page
 which actually distract our concentration. By accessing
internet
 many juvenile watch porn movies which can disrupt their brains and minds. In conclusion,
Internet
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the Internet
 has both pros and cons. But its pros
is
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are
 acute in comparison with its cons. The consequences is actually depends on the
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 of our usage. If people use it for good objective,
then
 undoubtedly the outcome will be good. And if people use it for
bad purpose
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a bad purpose
bad purposes
,
then
 the outcome will be detrimental.
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