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You are currently taking a course at a college but you will need to have a week off during this course. Write a letter to the college Principal. In the letter give details of your course explain why you need a week off say what you want the Principal to do.

#course #college #week
Dear Mr Ken, My full name is Dung Dang Thi My and I’m
student
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 of
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 class at
business
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 master course. I’m writing
this
 letter to you for announcing that I’ll have 1 week off
on
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next
 month from 20 to 27 July
,
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 2020 because I need to take a flight to VietNam – my country for attending my sister’s wedding.
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 my family member so that I should be there for sharing happiness. On
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 to 27 July period, there still have 2 subjects that need me to take
examination
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, so please help me to arrange an online one so that I won’t miss any else. Please help me to have your approval comment on
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 email and announce to
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 responsible
teach
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 – Mrs Kim. When I back I’ll have a lot of lovely
gift
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 from my country for you and all
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 class students. Thanks and have a good day
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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