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Many women are choosing to have children later in life. Why is this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent days, more and more women decide to give birth later in
life
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, the benefits and drawbacks of
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 phenomenon are considerable. In my opinion, I do believe that the advantages are far better than the disadvantages. As human, we do have our own passions and dreams which needed to be fullfilled in order to get to the highest satisfaction in
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, and in the process of doing so, we may encounter some difficulties and concerns which are there to prevent us from achieve our disire, as women these barriers are even more harder for them to surpass, more specifically when they decide to have children.
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,
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, will eat up all of their concerns as well as time, so as to provide a carefree childhood for their children.
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, during the 90s a lot of women in Vietnam decided to build up their family when they were only twenty,
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 contributed for the unsatisfied marriages throughout their lives.
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, if women choose to pursue their dreams and passion
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 they will eventually obtain the happy
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 afterwards. Even if they may embrace with several drawbacks in
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 they would still have something to hold on,
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such such
 as stable career, financial independence, and so on. Some recent researches have pointed out that when independence women were asked whether or not they are satisfied with their lives, more than 80% said that they have nothing to complain about.
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 proves that having kids after you are fulfilled make
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 become more meaningful and livable than it suppose to be. In conclusion, there are many reasons why women choose to have kids at some certain point of 
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 but in order to achieve an idealistic
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, they should consider the best way to do so. As for me, I do concur with the idea of having kids later in
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 which would be the best solution.
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