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Many women are choosing to have children later in life. Why is this? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, giving birth later in
life
 is said to be a tendency of female people. There is a main cause of
this
 trend that can be explained why females choose to follow
this
 way of
life
. From the data that I have collected from researches, I believe that the drawbacks of
this
 practice will outweigh the merits. There is a primary reason why many women in modern society tend to give birth at certain periods in their later
life
. They are of opinion that having babies does not matter to them because they believe that having enough money to make ends meet is far more important than having children. They put too much emphasis on finance since they think that if they do not have enough money to make sure their children have a happy
life
, their children may suffer from a host of difficulty.
However
, from a
health
 perspective, children who are born when their mother in the middle-aged are likely to have some
health
 problems in connection with their physical
health
.
In addition
, when an aged couple decides to give birth, there are serious
health
 risks for the woman in the prenatal and postnatal periods. Raising kids at old age is more arduous than that at a young age, not only because their
health
 will decline, but
also
 because their children are too little to self-manage.
Moreover
, having children when reaching over 35 can affect pregnancy due to aging
health
.
As a result
, babies are not healthy enough or even die a premature death. In conclusion, in recent years, women are bound to have babies when they have a stable
life
 relating to financial satisfaction. In
this
 essay, I have demonstrated a trigger for
this
 negative trend, and mothers who have children later will experience the
health
 problems mentioned above.
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