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International air fares are falling and tourism is growing. What are the advantages and disadvantages of increasing tourism activity?

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In previous years the
tourism
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 industry has
sky rocketed
propels bright light high in the sky, or used to propel a lifesaving line or harpoon
skyrocketed
, due to decrease in the cost of air tickets. The millions of tourists left a considerable amount of money in visited countries, which created a new
workplaces
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workplace
 and improved finances of residents. In other hand
,
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,
 uncontrolled
tourism
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 destroys natural habitat of wild animals, pollute environment and make
stress
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the stress
 on residents.
To begin
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 with, according to forecast the
tourism
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 industry is estimated to contribute the highest proportion of income
,
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,
 and surpasses oil industry. It is clear that, many countries are receiving a considerable amount of profit from the
tourism
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industryindustry
the people or companies engaged in a particular kind of commercial enterprise
industry
industry industry
, which spent on development of facilities and to social obligations.
For instance
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, in Turkey thousands of hotels and restaurants are built to satisfy the desire of visitors, which
also
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 employ local people.
Moreover
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, tourists will promote the host state, by spreading information to his surrounding, which eventually will affect in increase of investments amount or popularity of the country among the world.
Secondly
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, in the process of communication both sides exchange different ideas, get to know about cultural features and become more tolerate about the traits of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 culture.
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, the visitors usually are not concerned about the future attractions. The
rubish
worthless material that is to be disposed of
rubbish
rubies
rabbis
 and polluted eco-system is just a top of the iceberg, whereas some cases include vandalism, cultural disrespect to the tradition and culture of a resident. To conclude, it is important to
conctantly
without variation or change, in every case
constantly
 monitor attractions and
visiors
someone who visits
visitors
 to elaborate conflict and crime. Despite of a
risks
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risk
, the
tourism
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 is
enourmous
extraordinarily large in size or extent or amount or power or degree
enormous
 segment of
economy
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the economy
, which brings significant benefits to both sides, in case of proper attitude.
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