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Many people believe that social media sites such as Facebook have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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The advancement in the technology and social media
such
 as Facebook, Instagram and twitter
have digitally connected
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digitally connect
 the world. As per my opinion, I partially agree that the networking has both positive and negative effects on individuals as well as society. It is partly true that with the
digitalization
the administration of digitalis for the treatment of certain heart disorders
digitalisation
, the usage of the social websites have been dramatically increased to connect with the people or understand about their lifestyle and customs or gain knowledge about the various places in one single click.
For example
, many adventurers post the live video of events or places which can be enjoyed just sitting at the home
infront
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in front
 of the screen. Apart from that, you can easily contact your friends, family or relatives across the other part of the world. On the contrast, overuse of wrong websites may result in cyber crime as well as
temptation
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the temptation
 of the
unneccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
 products due to the
misadvertisment
.
For instance
, many fake companies post
worthless job description
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a worthless job description
worthless job descriptions
on
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of
 the sites to steal the personal details which ultimately results in the crime. Sometimes,
decsription
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a description
description
 of the commodity by the cheaper price have forced the society to opt which are later found
be
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to be
 worthless. To conclude, each website must develop their own terms and conditions to protect one's privacy and
also
 it is
an
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a
 prime
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
responsibilities
 of an individual to restrict the use of it to avoid from the
fradulent
intended to deceive
fraudulent
 case which eventually makes
an
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a
 negative impact on the society.
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